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neither daysnor spacedisconnect closed eyes'betrayal of presencefelt stillbetween clutched palmsreminiscencelong past touchas moistened lipslanguishover lover'sfragrant kissneither daysnor...
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I really like the title of this one z & the sentiments too. Welcome to aiap. Glad you made it over.Matt
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I hope you dont mind the following suggestion of a change of linebreaks. I really like this poem a lot, I just think "eyes" shouldnt end the third line, it looks bad IMO.neither daysnor space...
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cassia--i value feedback. your suggestion not only affects the presentation, but the meter. where the voice trails and pauses concerns me.i am just beginning to learn the intricacies of meter and...
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Or like this?neither daysnor spacedisconnect the betrayalof presencefelt stillbehind closed eyesbetween clutched palms(...)I prefer the originals wording, I just dont like this damn apostrophe at the...
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ophelia--my english profs helped me to develop thick skin and a little humility. no problem.please comment on my other piece in critical. i write regularly at themses. here's my...
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Z-Glad to see you getting around...I like this poem and have little knowledge of proper format, meter, etc. so I will only say that I have gained greatly by posting in this forum.Visit Me At Eves...
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zawadi, hi again. bravo with this one. I do consider the aforementioned suggestions worthwhile. Then again, you knew that. Thank you.Chris Dulcet Muses Lives!'Love' is the condition in which the...
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